Tuesday, November 23, 2010

Wednesday - One Shot

Last night
The rain drenched me.
Cold and shivering
I came to you
Seeking warmth

Your mouth
Did not
Claim mine
To blow a heat
To Life

Instead
You broke dried twigs
From the past
Gathered
Dry leaves
Of the time gone by
And built
A fire

Emptying our hearts
Of shriveled words
Smoothing out lines
We studied our palms
Shedding tears...

Then
Pruning , sawing
Whatever you found
Outgrowing
On my body ,
Chopping off
The taboos
All these
You fed to flames
To keep me warm
And alive.

26 comments :

Lightning Bug's Butt said...

Heavy.

Brian Miller said...

wow. very intriguing...taking away hopefully that which you no longer needed...and in that healing i imagine great intimacy...

Monkey Man said...

Those are hard feelings to be dealing with. You have expressed them with great life.

jason evans said...

Sounds like a savior.

gospelwriter said...

I rather like this - in fact, on second reading I like it very much. It is sometimes useful to perform certain sorts of rituals to tame the past such that it can no longer interfere with the living of life on a day to day basis. This is how this poem reads to me. The imagery really speaks to me... Thank you

moondustwriter said...

I love the image of broken twigs from the past
beautifully penned Mona

I hope there are roaring fires in the future

Love from the Moon

Shubhajit said...

I must quote here from Upanishad

"The whole of life is only a swan song! Never forget those lines:

The lion, when stricken to the heart,
gives out his mightiest roar.
When smitten on the head, the cobra lifts its hood.
And the majesty of the soul comes forth,
only when a man is wounded to his depths."

**********

Your sadness is pleasant. Hold the tears and convert it into gasoline. Burn! What else we are to do? This whole life a string business, finding happiness in unhappiness.

kavisionz said...

And wasn't that good?!?! Ofcourse it mustn't have felt all that great just then.. but later?? Hell yea!! Cuz now, that fire will last long!!

Very well articulated, and a lovely flow to this poem, Mona...

the walking man said...

To be dry and with a friend who has skill in the use of the pruning tools is a fine place to be.

Claudia said...

i loved this - and it does have in it's sadness a very positive feeling for me

Gathered
Dry leaves
Of the time gone by
And built
A fire...very beautiful image

Eric Alder said...

Sounds like a better way to be warmed up than just a quick blast of heat. This kind of warming stays with you. A touchingly romantic One Shot!

Steve said...

Ah, the joy of coming together even as you're evolving. Good work.

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

some great comments and deservedly so..was a very strong poem...thanks for sharing pete

Helena Malheur said...

"dried twigs from the past" wow, very powerful. wonderful use of imagery - well articulated metaphor as well. Enjoyed the read! Thanks for sharing.

snowelf said...

I love the part that says "studying palms".

--snow

jodi said...

Aw, Mona. Very intimate and warm in such a tender sort of way.

ivan said...

From sticks and leaves--a rekindling.

tolbert said...

You broke dried twigs
From the past
Gathered
Dry leaves
Of the time gone by
And built
A fire

Beautiful words concerning the growth of a true-love relationship. We all must walk through the fire at some point in our lives and what better companion to have than one who builds a fire to warm rather than to destroy.

I like this one a lot!!

tolbert said...

Hi Mona

Thanks for the tip on the
homeopathic medicine (Hypericum Perforatum)...I will look for it. I'm not sure how familiar you are with bipolar disorder but trust me, it can be a trip.

Thanks for visiting my site and your kind comments.

Hope you are well...

~t~

Mona said...

Tolbert, You are welcome :)

Shashi said...

Its great one shot Dear Mona... I liked it very much....
Thanks for sharing...

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L.L. Barkat said...

"you broke dried twigs from the past"

that was really nice. arrested my thoughts.

Peter said...

"... chopping off the taboos" ... all - or at least most of them - sound good to me!

Have been too absent from your blog for a while, buit now I made the tour. A great welcome to the expected Nadia!

lime said...

this is really an amazing piece. i shall be pondering it for quite some time. the imagery is unexpected yet perfect.

please forgive my absence lately. congratulations on your blogiversary and on the birth of your sweet little niece. :)

Sabi Sunshine said...

Dear Mona,

This is my first time at your blog and love your blog very much would like to be your friend.

Take Care
Love
Sabi Sunshine

cathy said...

Ah Mona! as beautiful as ever.